Today’s prompt comes to us from TJ Kearney, who invites us to try a seven-line poem called a san san, which means “three three” in Chinese (It’s also a term of art in the game Go). The san san has some things in common with the tritina, including repetition and rhyme. In particular, the san san repeats, three times, each of three terms or images. The seven lines rhyme in the pattern a-b-c-a-b-d-c-d.
Here’s an example san san from TJ’s blog, Bag of Anything:
Drinking the driven storm, the sturdy apple
Dances, between sky and earth, her spring-young leaves.
Knowing no purpose, knowing only season,
Her spring-young leaves, storm-driven, dapple
Earth and sky; all that my eye perceives
Dances. My eye drinks in the apple’s spring-
Young leaves, her dance that has no reason:
Only the storm, driving each dappled thing.
As you can see, three images or terms are repeated: the driven storm; the spring-young leaves; the dance, and the seven lines rhyme per the pattern given above. I hope you have fun giving the san san a try.
Today’s san san has been a sudoku of a poem. I’ve actually reworked a poem I’ve already written, because once again when presented with a ‘write a form’ instruction I’m never sure what theme to pick. It was easier for me to tweak rhymes and patterns with a framework already there.
The birdwatcher
I, the bittern, boom in sedges,
hide my head in yellow of rustling reeds,
watch waters ripple, stroked by wind unseen.
Through rustling reeds and spring-green hedges
where waters ripple and wind unseen blows seeds
I peer and see them come to watch today.
I boom in rustling reeds. I watch binoculars gleam
where waters ripple; then like wind unseen I turn away.
Thanks for introducing me to this form. I have next week’s poetry challenge sorted 🙂 I loved your booming bitterns in the sedges— very WBYeats.
Thank you, Jane – I had never heard of it before today’s prompt, but it made my brain work!
Somehow your second comment disappeared, Jane. Are you going to post your san san on your website?
I will do. I had been going to save it as an example of a san san for next week’s challenge, but I suppose (hope) I’ll be able to write another!
That works rather well! This is a new form for me too, and I rather like it. Fine images.
Have a go, Marion! Here’s the original which wasn’t a san san – written for World Wetlands Day in February:
The bird watcher
inspired by a visit to Leighton Moss RSPB Reserve
I, the bittern, boom in the sedges,
hide my head in the yellow of rustling reeds,
watch water ripple, stroked by the wind.
Through the reeds I peer, watch them come
in dark green anoraks; heads move, necks crane
in the long slitted eye of the creaking wooden hut.
They do not see me. I boom in the sedges,
hide my head in the yellow of rustling reeds,
wait for the glint of their binoculars and turn away.
Reblogged this on buildingapoem and commented:
A new poet, Christine Cochrane, introduces us to a new form, the San San.
Thanks for reblogging. Please note the prompt came from the NaPoWriMo website – I hadn’t heard of a san san before yesterday. ‘The birdwatcher’ is my first attempt at it!
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